When he kissed me…
Tasneem Kagalwalla

Thank you for your response Tasneem, which seems to go in two directions at once:

  1. If the kiss gave you shelter, then the kiss changed the storm for you. So then the question (title) and response (poem) do not agree in the literal sense of subject agreement. This is not an opinion. It’s grammer.
  2. The kiss (also ?) brought all the elements of that internal storm into one moment; in that case the storm would still be impacting you and there would be no shelter.

As an editor, I tend to notice when words stand on their own two legs and reveal the writer’s core intention or unintentionally teeter off track. That’s all…

What I loved was how evocative the sand dunes and storm were. Thank you for putting this out into the world.

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