# SCENE 8
Adam Westbrook
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Feedback #4

Hello Adam!

I like the idea, the choreography, and the pace. It’s a playful escalation and the dad is in a comic light right away (Michelin star), but there’s also a serious theme (When you can’t reach somebody, esp. kids, at all). One imagines some Pixar short, some Buster Keaton.

The repetition of “computer generated” throughout sort of mirrors the repetitive structure, but I would think about cutting it down. The fact is clear, and these are unnecessary pointers towards a critical interpretation (‘Only simulated life threatening real life’) of what’s happening.

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