Jeff — You just demonstrated the value and the power of the first paragraph. The headline worked, too. While not a new writer, the appeal is in the curiosity that there may be something new, coming from you. You delivered in aces. Make that a royal flush. You are clear about what you are not. Not a writer. Not the boss of me. You have me hooked and I’m all in to see what the positive side of the coin is to all you are not. My brain thanks you for use of multiple images throughout the story. It loves images, colors, meanings and white, still spaces to absorb everything in your next paragraph.