You say you give the screenwriting dream “twenty percent”. Where does the other eighty percent go? Does it go to hating your classmates and their “settled” lives? You have some good points, but your writing is so passive that it feels like things are happening to you, not because of you.
All that being said, you have potential, just use more active voice and write things that put passion in you. The greatest screenwriters write scripts that you can feel the passion in through the screen. Show the world that and your on your way