Sandra Dauber
Aug 24, 2017 · 1 min read

Feedback #1 I liked the naturalness of the dialogue. It was funny. Two things that occurred to me, is whether you could try to make it have some conflict within it somehow besides the joke aspect of it. Then again, that may be too much for 1 scene anyway, idk. Or foreshadowing could be in this scene possibly too. I do like the simplicity of the scene, it is not trying to do too much.
And the other thing is it would be good possibly to have the different characters stand out more as different from each other.
But I liked the scene and was interested in the fact that they had a tally board. Cause usually 911 dispatch places seem like they’d be really serious, so it was very interesting that you changed that. And I am definitely interested in the why, that makes it so different then a normal place.

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