Hey Tesha, after reading your blog post, I made several conclusions like you have the concept of the issue which is the way women are viewed in hip hop, but you did not talk about how this affects your audience (me). Doing a cause and effect approach would have taken your post to high grounds. You had a few grammar errors, and you did not elaborate on the videos that you used in your post. I feel as though they are just there. Lastly, you did not use any outside sources which is the essential base for the remix blog. I just feel as though you could have done better with your blog post.