Write a 1–2 page dialogue-centric scene, then copy/paste as a RESPONSE.
2017 Dialogue-Writing Challenge: Day 10
Scott Myers
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#10 prompt -A character attempts to share something while crying.

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INT. hallway, Busy Bee Play School. 293 Tram St; 0181 Pretoria, South Africa – DAY

Chelsea and Cathy, two Mothers, are sitting at a makeshift lunch table composed of a four desks joined side by side as they eat lunch.

CHELSEA

Don’t take this too lightly, Cinderella.

Cathy is sobbing

CATHY

I’m not. I’m not taking this lightly at all.

Sobbing some more

CHELSEA

There’s no second chance in life.

CATHY

Or first.

CHELSEA

You’re not put on this earth to just go ahead and do anything you want.

CATHY

You’re no marriage counselor. You said you were a child therapist.

CHELSEA

I am, a child therapist.

CATHY

Yes well, excuse me, thug life but you’re not pushing an empty baby carriage.

Sniff, sniff…, sobbing some more.

CATHY (CONT’D)

There’s no baby in my baby carriage. There’s a pair of brown shoes in my baby carriage. Brown shoes wrapped in a blanket, men’s shoes.

CHELSEA

That’s Debbie’s baby carriage.

CATHY

Who’s Debbie?

CHELSEA

Debbie’s Billy’s mom. Debbie used to go out for walks. She’d walk her baby carriage all over the neighborhood looking for “Daddy.”

Sobbing gently slows, slowing, slower, stops.

CATHY

That’s cute.

CHELSEA

No it’s not cute.

CATHY

It’s sounds cute.

CHELSEA

Well it’s not. Debbie used to go out for walks wearing “Daddy’s” big brown shoes. She’d walk and walk and walk all over the neighborhood wearing “Daddy’s” big brown shoes of his, pushing her baby carriag looking for “Daddy”.

Cathy bursts out into tears again

CATHY

Where’s my Suzy? What happened to my baby? Where is she? Where’s my baby carriage? How did this Debbie’s baby carriage get here? Where’s my baby carriage? Where’s my Suzy?

CHELSEA

Debbie, on one of her walks to find “Daddy” never came back. I don’t know where they went. I don’t know what happened to either of them. She left the shoes in the baby carriage. She left the carriage here.

CATHY

Help me. Please help. Suzy! END.

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