Amy F
Amy F
Aug 27, 2017 · 1 min read

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Hello Denise

Poor Candace. She didn’t see that coming and neither did I, so cheers to the twist! :) I have two think abouts:

  1. I’m thinking the wine dialogue is there to show that Candace and Connor’s friendship extends beyond the office. If so, I can see the value but it seems random. What if you move Candace’s line about saving a bottle of merlot for his promotion day? If she mentions wine first, then it seems natural that Connor would then mention Margo.
  2. Connor expresses praise/admiration for Candace which makes me wonder why she is being fired. She sounds competent and if the company is growing then why does she have to go? Could there be some sort of hint? Something that at first might seem unimportant until we come upon the twist?

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