Lane
Lane
Aug 26, 2017 · 1 min read

FEEDBACK #6

So I’m a little shaky on the nature of Dan and Jonie’s relationship. They don’t seem to be dating or have any history at first, but then Dan is so hostile towards her that clearly something has happened before the start of this scene. And then Jerry refers to them as his “favorite couple”? There’s a lot going on, so it would be helpful to have a clearer understanding of what dynamics are at play here.

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