Thanks for the feedback as always!
Yes it is a nightmare. I’ll review the prepositions and see what I can do to clarify it while keeping the tension and the message. Challenging, it’s probably why I don’t use these breaks though I sometimes force myself to do it.
I’m still a bit confused myself about the break and the speed/flow. Some people say the breaks make people read faster to the next line, but then when a breath could also indicate a pause or taking a breath it seemed contradictive. I haven’t listen to reciting to understand how it would change.
Thank you again, I’m learning so much from the prompts. I really appreciate your time in selecting these challenges and the explanation.