Editing Notes

Casey Long
Aug 25, 2017 · 3 min read

The feedback I have is for episode 3 of Grimdustries. It was well done and these are just some notes on what I thought, some of them are opinion based and could work better a different way. But good job to the editors regardless!

I think the opening of cutting between Paul and Ms. Muerte, Jeff and Patrick is a good editing choice. I like the build-up it creates. But I think the shots of Paul should be more spanned out, so that the opening shot is of Ms. Muerte and there is a shot of Paul between Patrick and Jeff.

Then going to Paul in the car talking to Charon could use a shot before that outside the car with a mobile phone dialling sound. The cut to Paul talking to him to introduce it more and separate the opening style from the rest of the episode.

I like the car pulling up shot, It give the audience enough time to not feel thrown by it. But I think it can end a bit earlier (before Paul takes is hand off the wheel) the cut to the next shot and take out those second in the middle. And part of Charon’s line before Paul gets out of the car could be cut shorter and it would still make sense. The end shot on Charon trying to finish his sentence hopelessly is very funny and works well to finish hat scene.

I think the sound of Caleb on the train tracks kicking the stones is a bit abrupt, If the sound either started in the previous shot or was delayed I think that would solve this. Really nice time pacing of Caleb discovering Paul. The shot choices work and the time between them lets the audience think about what is going on. I like the points when the frame shows Caleb but you can still hear Paul’s dialogue, it is smoother and easier to follow as well as showing the audience what is going on for Caleb.

The train hitting was simple and effective. It wasn’t distracting but gave enough for the audience to understand what happened.

Once Charon gets in the car and Caleb is already in there, it works really well to see him in there looking to the left of frame. Then to cut to Pal looking back (also to the left of frame) is a nice parallel.

The “My name’s Daniel” punch line is well paced too, and finishes on a high.

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