Louis Bennett

FEEDBACK 4: Louis Bennett

I agree with Lane’s feedback. It’s hard to cram details within 2 pages. I like the foreshadowing ideas. Consider tipping us off as to why she’s selecting this particular patron. Yes, he’s drunk and her last customer but is there something else about him that fits her victim selection profile? This detail would later become important in detective sleuthing.

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