Farida Haque
Sep 3, 2018 · 1 min read

Being a sci fi buff, I enjoyed what you wrote. Are you a physicist? You use science as we know it, with expertise.

I love the choice of names!

Small suggestion? To enhance the effectiveness of the story I have found in my own writing that if I break up long-winded monologues with actual speech interjections ‘why, how, exclamations, dramatic gestures etc’ from characters, I tend to hold the readers attention.

Excellent story. Bravo!

    Farida Haque

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    Multimedia artist, writer, poet. ‘Celebrating other lives, I am a sparrow in the shadow of a rosebush...’ faridahaque@gmail.com