Wonderful topic choice, Yidan. Privacy when it comes to celebrities is something that is difficult to tackle because many believe that their priacy being invaded is what they get for being in the public eye. I agree that they do deserve just as much priacy as ordinary people who arent under the limelight.
You presented good arguments however lacked punctuality. You structured your post well which made it quite easy to read. Your choice of examples were also well selected as it referenced your topic.
However, had your used a few more scholarly resources, it would have strengthened your post and given you the extra boost.
Overall, good post.