Jul 21, 2017 · 1 min read
I loved the first two, very eerie and the reveal at the end gets your point across well. For the ‘Refresh Your Timeline’ story, I think perhaps the twist of her suddenly being in the past doesn’t quite suit your story. Perhaps she can stay in the present, but she suddenly becomes invisible? Or she becomes mute? Something that will prevent her from communicating with anyone but keeps her in the present may be a better metaphor for what you’re trying to say with that one. Just a thought!
