I think it needs work even if it is only a travel brochure! It was off the cuff on a busy day. More about the photos than the words.
Funny thing is, so often my off the cuff stories receive the most attention. Go figure.
That said, I do hear everything you are saying to me Mark. I am taking steps, reading “writing” books and magazines. Hoping that the road will keep lighting up and showing me the right way. Your thought provoking comments are always welcome.
I’ve been reading a book by Strunk and EB White. It addresses economy of word usage as you mention. I do need to work on that.
I have learned through past experience, I will not find success on my own. I am not reluctant to do the work, I just need somebody to direct my efforts most effectively.
There is that famous saying…. Student ready, teacher appears.