Nice story Anne! Suggestion: I would change “He told me about New York, where he was from and where they lived. He told me about their son, who he had left behind there.” to He told me about New York, where he was from, where they lived and where he left his son.” Cleaner, less wordy and even though it has less words, reads much beter.

Wish you much success in your writing career and I am looking forward reading more of your stuff, especially any one about fish tacos…