What Works 9/20

The article begins with a personal lead, relating the story back to the reader. The writer pulls the reader in using a lot of descriptive devices, giving the reader a good idea of what the rest of the story is about. I found this a little redundant because I know what Facebook is and how it works, the story could have gone without all the Facebook jargon. I think the point was made rather quickly that the article was about how Facebook pin points its users. I got a little lost in the middle, as the article transitions from political campaigns to Facebook pages and memes. I think the writer could have included something like that in her introduction to tie everything together. The nut graph of the story is about the fifth paragraph in, when she discusses Facebook pages and how they are the product of 2016. Its a new perspective I haven’t heard and the wording is very clear, concise, factual. the 7th paragraph in where it is discussed that these pages rival different media outlets and news sources is also where the pivotal point is, why this story matters, because just as many people that watch actual news are watching these pages. The writer links to different pages for examples which is good to see the pages in context. I think the pictures and examples are good multimedia elements that help the reader visualize what exactly on Facebook the writer is referring too. The picture with the headline of the article is really good too, combing cultural elements such as emojis to the symbol for the US government. I think a soundcloud interview or on camera interview with the inventor or creator of one of these sites would have been really good, I want to see what these people who create the content look like and think like, I want to hear there perspectives and not just read it.

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