i. thoroughness & comprehension (+)

This is exactly the kind of piece I want to read: radical femme queers being radical femme queers, no matter what. This is a personal essay that should easily become its own viral Fuck Off Fund. The way you weave together your personal narrative and don’t even mention Paulette’s until halfway through really shows a creative, appropriate, and amazing way to respond to the piece.

ii. creativity (+)

The photos and GIFs used are extremely effective; they don’t take up too much room, but are their own punctuation and statements within the piece. Again, all need attribution, even if you just find them on the internet. The structure of this piece really keeps it moving along and touches on heavy subjects, but allows the audience to understand those statement, their impact, and move on to your larger idea.

iii. use of platform (+)

From the headline to the nutgraph to the online response (16 recommendations!) you’ve really given this piece life!! Also, thank you for directly quoting the reading, it shows that you understand this platform, as well as that of formal journalistic writing.