i: thoroughness & comprehension (+)

This is a thoughtful and well-planned response to the Fuck-off Fund, but it interprets those financial and societal pressures in a way that would be appealing to different audiences. The personal catalyst and exploration is a story that anyone could appreciate.

ii: creativity (+)

The screenshot of Shields is a great use of punctuation in the article, as well as the lovely narrative for this takes, but it would benefit from a caption (or video?!) I’m sure you could find a gif. Also, I’m yearning for photos from this tropical vacation, it would make a great statement at the end of such an exclamatory piece!

iii: use of platform (–)

I would take some time for your next piece to just play around with the features that Medium offers, it’s like Facebook or any other platform in that the more time you spend on it or using it, the easier it becomes to use and navigate (I’m still having trouble getting to the publication because that aspect is so counterintuitive.) There is no clear distinction between the headline, the nutgraph, and the text, which makes it confusing for the reader.