i: thoroughness & comprehension (√)

The connection between money and hard drugs here is very interesting, and seems like there is a slight disparate nature between the way the U.S. deals with addicts and the way China does, and it would have been interesting to see the comparisons, which might have made the piece a little fuller and more in-depth. And again, I’m looking for some sort of resolution, besides the foreboding warning that you’re giving.

ii: creativity (+)

True crime is such a hot topic right now, and this piece uses that sensationalism to its advantage; the photo at the beginning is a little startling, and it would have been more appropriate to see a less brutal photo, especially because you make sure not to name her, but use her photo? Either include ALL the details or NONE. Also, for photos like that, it would be wise to include a trigger warning (domestic violence, misogyny, abuse, physical abuse, hard drugs, drug use, etc.)

iii: use of platform (√)

This piece needs links to hard news stories to solidify the facts you’re giving. You mention that you wrote on this case, so where is a link? Even if it isn’t in English, the audience would appreciate it. Again, this piece would benefit from a pull quote or two, and perhaps a sub-headline. Why does the money matter? You should answer in your nutgraph or the first paragraph (lead.)