Alice Comes Undone
Felicia C. Sullivan

Overall, being constructive here, it was a little bit confusing at times what was going on, or who was thinking or saying what. That’s just me though. I think it was good, but there’s not much of an explanation on why Kevin did what he did.

There doesn’t really need to be an elaborate reason, but all their interactions with each other were brief.

My suggestion would be to break up the conversations with the use of quotes to help differentiate who is saying what.

Overall I liked it. A bit of a coincidence too haha. The main character in the book I am writing on here right now is named Alice. Check it out if you find yourself with some spare time.

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