IMMJ 2nd Week Assignment : (TEXT)Chinese Employment Market to the Graduates.
Darrick.Hepaier
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It’s a fine first attempt, but there are many problems and you are clearly not consuming enough quality international news. Your English is poor and this makes it difficult to grasp your meaning — please ensure you get another student to proofread in the future, you should be proofreading each others work. Often times you make points but then have no data or facts to back this up. For example you say the situation is worse in 3rd or 4th tier cities but then offer no evidence for this opinion.