Biography 1st Draft (Just Text)
Youjin Nam
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It was very interesting learning about the life and work of Mucha. I especially enjoyed the story of his first poster that got ripped off the wall by viewers — I feel like you would speak more about that one. Over all it should be proof read for issues like run on sentences, tense changes, and punctuation. I felt like there could be better divisions of paragraphs to lead the reader to “chapters” or Mucha’s life. Right now, it feels like a a running history, without defining points you want to communicate. Bring a little more life into it! Good job!

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