FD Prompt #1 — I am from…
Daveen
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Hi Daveen! Glad you’re here :) I like the nice repetition of “I am from” and then the secondary line that clarifies the thing you name above. With those secondary lines, I might look at getting rid of the introductory “from” in each of them. I think it would tighten it up, it just felt like a lot of froms to me! So the beginning would look like this:

I am from family,
hand holds and group photos.

I second Darren’s idea to throw in a few more concrete things. I like “few rules, secrets, and pushing boundaries,” but what exactly does that look, feel, taste, smell like for the speaker? I think this piece is a great start that you could definitely expand and grow.

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