This is interesting, Dewi! The poem has a lot of momentum because of the line breaks. I wonder if it might benefit from adding some stanza breaks to further break up the content. I enjoyed the rhythm and some of the rhyme and other language play, I especially like the ending. To choose sleep again has a nice closure to it.

I think there might be an excessive number of prepositions at play in the first half of the poem — of horror, in the morning, of betrayals, on the chase, in corridors, of possibilities. It makes the poem feel jumpy, which might be what you’re going for! Still I found all those directions and specifications a little challenge to wrap my mind around in time and space, and then when you add in the abstractions such as realization, sensations, betrayal, possibilities, it is even more detached. Am I understanding correctly that the first part of the poem is a description of a nightmare?

Thanks for sharing this piece! I always enjoy your writing :)