Monica Becker
Sep 3, 2018 · 1 min read

Hey Lucas! Congrats on your project. Despite the caveats already mentioned by people in the comments, you brought to light a very sensitive and challenging issue, that’s really important. If you keep being open to receive critics I think you’ll be going a long way!
That being said, my feedback would be on the side of writing Medium posts. You’ve started with

“The automated response that is supposed stop them and save lives feels lifeless.

This needs to change now.”

and right after there is a image from your solution to the problem. The way it was put seems like the image refers to the issue you just pointed that have to change now. This led me to read a good part of the story imagining that you were criticizing that first image. I think it would have been a lot less confusing if you only showed your solution at the end. Choosing the right images and the right time to insert them seems to play a big part on writing with a good flow (at least from my reader perspective).
Hope this helps with something and keep up the good work!

    Monica Becker

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