I also think it looks awful. My child isn’t a dog.
Tracy, I don’t disagree with you completely.
H. Nemesis Nyx
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Hi H,

This response should be after your last post where you ask for insight on wording, but I wanted to highlight rather than rewrite.

It sounds like you’re sincerely asking for a way to make your point without coming off as judgmental, and I think the answer is more simple than you realize.

Amplifying your writing clarifies your meaning. Making a bridge between your perspectives and your feelings adds clarity. Explain, for example, why a harness makes you feel awful, beyond the image it evokes.

Making the connection between the two sentences/thoughts would make the second sentence read like a reflection rather than an accusation. As someone who has ‘been there’, I hope this helps.

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