The Afterworld Saga — 2
Abby O. Akoto
354

Great storyline which flows with the previous chapter, and a subtle surprise which helps readers spin the events into a whole, comprehensible picture. Really nice work, Abby O. Akoto.

However, I think you should create some more mystery for the readers by omitting the last paragraph. I think it reveals too much about what happened and that won’t pull readers in much.

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