Caro, I can relate. I myself had no idea what I was getting myself into when I first went too. The gratitude you feel and joy after those few hours is amazing. The transitions should be more smooth, don’t go from point to point so roughly try to find some connection. I can see the connections because I have had the same experience however for someone who hasn’t had the same experience maybe its hard to see where it all connects. I would like to know and read more about the failing part since I myself sometimes fear of it. I think you need to figure out the big idea, the takeaway. You use proper grammar and punctuation. Remember to build on each idea and really hook the audience. Make us remember your posts, you name. I know you can because I have read your work before and know that you have a great voice, show it.