Really excellent. I like your novel characterization of Leia. (I did notice what looks like a typo. "pissed of" where I think you mean "pissed off" in this sentence: "To have a realistically frustrated, angry, snappy character who isn’t “strong” and quippy but who’s pissed of because she’s trying to do something really emotionally and technically and strategically difficult shouldn’t be unusual.") Indeed. this shouldn't be unusual.