Is it morally right to monetize the organ market?
- Which is better, a organ market based on good will or supply and demand?
I think that this new question gets directly to the point, but it is focusing more on the effectiveness of change rather than the moral implications around it.
2) The research I did simply reaffirmed my beliefs. One thing that struck me was the effectiveness of a legalized market, to the point where there is no waiting list.
3) I tried to integrate cohesion and cohesiveness where I could, but other than that, it was mainly just grammatical and adding in more examples to state my case.
I've mainly improved my writing by following a formula given by a teacher/professor, a 2 chunk paragraph is easier for me to adopt into my writing style than abstract ideas like cohesiveness. I will try to add new things to my revision but I have not focused on any.