2017 Dialogue-Writing Challenge: Day 8
Scott Myers
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FEEDBACK 7 — SCENE WAITER SERVES EX (DONOVAN CHU)

Somewhere Allison calls Robert, Bobby. Was that a mistake or intentional?
Why would she do that? To show him that she still cares for him in a friendly way?

Compared to Allison, Robert seems very angry about their relationship ending. Allison seems very cool and she has moved on. I feel there is something not finished here.

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