This story has real promise, Rosemond. You would benefit from another Muslim person, in addition to Yousef. The repeat interviews with her start to feel a little bit the same. The most affecting video is, of course, the prayer. I think I would have led with that one and skipped James Puglisi’s video altogether. He doesn’t say anything so compelling that you couldn’t paraphrase it and he looks very nervous through the whole discussion. You also left a line in — a note to yourself (or to me) — that should have come out. I hope you will take another run through this for Hilltop Views. I think this is a terrific online story for the site once it’s been edited more carefully and has another Muslim student or two.