Meet the Woman Whose Hair Was Used to Make Your Extensions!
Kristen Van Nest

Your Priyanka would never say “LOL”. I like your narrative, but the voice is all wrong. And she wouldn’t be sporting headscarves, religion and region are both wrong.

Good details too. I’m not sure what you meant by “sullen curtain”. Is it a reference to the short story “purdah”? In any case, thought provoking, this anthropomorphisation of an inanimate object. Maggots in food is good, but rice wouldn’t easily get maggots, it is too dehydrating. Change it to chapati flour​.