Mohsin Khokhar

Hi Mohsin!

I like the quality of your photos, your model airplane turned out so cool! I like how you did something fun and constructive! Your sketches are also really neat and you did a great job explaining your mind map!

I wish that you had a little bit more pictures in the “do something fun” section to break up the text a little and also help show the process of making your airplane and help your blog tell a story. Also I think you need to break down your themes, the scope of your themes is a little broad for this project.

What if you broke the environment theme into specific environments like health in urban environments vs. rural environments. Or like for the mental health theme, you could narrow it down to issues involving mental health like the stigma involved, mental health disorders etc.

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