Everything about this is awkward (in an, at least to me, intentional way). The intro feels carefully arranged, with the narrative voice setting the stage for Chip and Don to give the reader a clear idea of where they are; this leads into the action of the piece — but the action (which in this case is the dialogue) fails to live up to that initial, careful setup. It’s quick. Lacks substance. Filled with pauses. And then the scene abruptly ends how it began. It’s just so…awkward. I’m left going back and reading it again. The introduction’s slow, methodical speech juxtaposes perfectly with Chip and Don’s short and aimless one making a little weird, singular moment for the reader to sort of awkwardly get through and decide how to feel about it lol. Well…that’s just how I read it.