Scott Vonasek
Sep 3, 2018 · 1 min read

Instead of a relatively small group — land owners, members of the Party, nobles — controlling the government for their own benefit, you had a system where everybody got the chance to try to control the government by electing representatives who would use the machinery of the government to limit the power of the insiders.

Your article was really going well until it got to the section above.

You could have covered the early section much more simply. Try this instead.

Governments always favor the politically powerful of the day. These groups shift over time as economies evolve. From land owners, to generals, to church officials, to bankers, to guilds and unions to traders to factory owners.

Political power shift along with economic power and each group in term tries to use political power to fend off the next group.

Dispersing power from kings to councils and eventually to democracies does not prevent the government favoring special interests, but makes the transition from one group to another less violent.

Unfortunately this negates the rest of your story.

SMV