Thesis Note#10: Draft Thesis Presentation

This article is a part of the continuing documentation series of my thesis proposal in the Introduction to Thesis course in the Department of Social Design Innovation at the School of Visual Arts. Alison Cornyn and Natalia Radywyl teach this class at SVA. in spring 2020. Please find the course intro here.

Meeting with Alison

On March 23, I had an initial thesis presentation with Alison(One of my tutors in Intro to Thesis class) to retrospect the progress I have done. These are some feedback I received:

  • Strong visuals
  • Lack of understanding of the existing healthcare system and healthcare support towards immigrants
  • Need more statistics about the issue context, i.e., why it matters
  • Need to uncover the deeper reasons under the immigrants’ story: why they made these decisions? And how they made decisions?

Based on the feedback, I did more secondary research on context and existing healthcare system and support. However, because of the urgent coronavirus situation in NYC, I failed to keep further contact with immigrants.

Presentation with Alison

Meeting with Natalia

On March 30, I had a second thesis presentation with Natalia(Another of my tutors in Intro to Thesis class) to present the thesis topic. These are some feedback I received:

  • Strong visuals, yet heavy text in some slides
  • Need a clearer and logical ecosystem map about the healthcare system and immigrants
  • Need to uncover the deeper reasons under the immigrants’ story: why they made these decisions? And how they made decisions?

After creating the ecosystem map, I realized the current topic is still too complicated to go further. At the same time, I was looking for more specific topics under and immigrants’ healthcare and shifted to women's health issues in the immigrants’ healthcare field.

Presentation with Natalia

Meeting with second-year advisors

On April 6, I had another thesis presentation with Esther and Jeff to present the thesis topic. These are some feedback I received:

  • Strong visuals, yet heavy text in some slides
  • Need a clear statement on why it matters showing what social values are in this topic
  • Need more consideration on the solution: where potential intervention would be in the system
  • Consider the partnership I am going to build according to the volunteer experience, existing contacts, and potential intervention: who I will work with

According to the feedback I received, I reconnected with some experts in the healthcare field. And I had a short talk with Miya, the chair of Design for Social Innovation, who works in healthcare for several years.

Meeting with Miya

I had a short talk with Miya after the last presentation. These are some feedback I received:

  • Clearer phrase on framing the thesis statement
  • Regular self-examine during the thesis work: as a Chinese-born researcher, do I have some cultural biases when I did the research with Chinese immigrants?
  • Reach out to a broader population and communities, such as the Asian Creative Association.
Presentation with Esther, Jeff, and Miya

Thank you for reading this! Please reach out to sshao3@sva.edu if you have any questions or comments!

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Sherrie Shao

A Product Designer Who Helps People & Enterprises Work Smarter @Moonraft☄️ Amateur writer + poet🖋️