Wow, john j flynn, it sounds like you may have picked up critique techniques on one of those Pop Idol TV shows. Ouch!
I’m sure you didn’t mean to come across as so critical of Dewi’s writing skills, but the tone comes across to me as both accusing (“hey, Dewi, what gives…”) and snide (“…poetry is at least good prose. perhaps you should translate your verse back into its original short story form.”)
You clearly have some good ideas for how to improve our poetry, though, so here are some tips for expressing those ideas in a more helpful way:
And here are K.E. Kimball’s official Fresh Darlings tips for constructive feedback:
So you want to give constructive feedback on a poem, but maybe you aren’t sure where to start? Here are twenty…medium.com
I’m looking forward to reading your abecedarian and learning from the experience :)