This is wonderful feedback on my story craft; thank you. When I write these vignettes, I tend to go really deep in one area and I worry about some details like these becoming a distraction rather than an aid. What got missed in this story is that my daughter was 4 when I met my husband, and his daughter (who I only mention briefly) was a teenager. Over the course of our dating and engagement, we moved in together and relocated from there into our current home. We were married several months before I made the decision to be baptized, while I was still highly-resistant to the idea of being Christian.
Thanks for taking the time to let me know how my writing broke down here; I’ll work on this in the future.