An interesting start, and definitely has me wanting to read more.
Peter Millane
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Hey Peter, thanks for checking it out, and for also for taking the time to provide some feedback. It’s certainly been an interesting process for me, receiving constructive criticism from people.

In your case, is it only brand names for technological devices? For instance, do real world makes of car irk you in a similar manner? I think “iPad” is the only brand name I included for some reason. As you’ll discover later, I did create a brand name for her VR headset.

Anyway, that aside, I’m glad you’re interested to read more, and I’d certainly like to hear from you as the book develops — even if it’s to say you’re giving up for some reason! This stuff is invaluable for us first-time authors.

Cheers, Toby

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