Well written, and I understand the point you are trying to make. I’m your audience so I understand why your character speaks in a voice which is too calm to be convincing, his grammar is too precise, and his sentences too long and complex. His vocabulary is several grades too sophisticated, and the level of his crazy and angry are entirely too muted — you should bring that bit up to 12 or 13. Now take that character and inject it with Meth. That is closer to who we are dealing with, and reasoning with him is a pipe-dream. As far as him being us, not even close.