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Nowadays, people tend to complex their writing style because the short, clear sentences can not show their intelligence. However, this tendency makes the passage hard for others to read, and people may have confusion among others ‘intelligent’ style of writing. I choose four sentences from my old writing to prove that clear sentences are more important than complex sentences.

A writer always has an awareness of whom they are writing for.

Problem: A nominalization follows a verb with little specific meaning.

A writer should aware of whom they are writing for.

Deriving from human culture, people have improved their thoughts and knowledge they already known and then explore now things.

problem: the art of pining down

People have improved the known information and explored

We can find not only the improvement of writing skills but also the thoughts and souls of passages are showing the own and diverse understanding of world.

Problem: the art of pin down.

We find the improvement of writing skills and thoughts of passage, showing people’s understanding of the world.

However, some students reject to go to the writing center because this is a representation of their weakness at writing.

Problem: One nominalization appears in a subject and a second appear after a verb or phrase like be, seems…

However, some students reject to go to the writing center because this represents their weakness.

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