DEAR NEIGHBOR: Thoughts on your recent street art
November 5, 2015—Chilhowee Park Neighborhood, Knoxville
IM HERE TO TALK TO YOU. YOU THINK YOU CAN KICK ME OUT MY OWN HOUSE? DENISE! GET OUT HERE. I KNOW WHAT YOU BEEN DOIN. BITCH YOU BETTER GET YOUR ASS OUT HERE. I AIN GOIN NOWHERE. YOU THINK I STILL CARE? I GOT NOTHING TO LOSE. I GOT NOTHIN TO LOSE.
First of all, you deserve credit for the way you clearly communicated your sincerity in this piece. Your honest, everyday wardrobe was a good choice. You positioned yourself in the middle of the street—a strong stance! And adopting a robust, even “loud,” voice meant that no one could have doubted your earnestness. However, my biggest concern with the work was that the person you intended it for was clearly uninterested. Everyone else, on the other hand, was roused by your performance: curiosity, nervousness, annoyance, fear. Excellent development of emotional narrative, but you need to work on honing your audience.