Review of Maryann Schaefer’s, “Fuck You, Brooke Shields or Belize 2023”

Thoroughness and Comprehension: (✓)

I really enjoyed how the concept of a “Fuck Off Fund” was turned on its’ head! Rather as seen as just an emergency instance, it was utilIzed as a means of “getting away, finding an escape, etc.) The headline caught my eye for sure and was a great lead into what I was expecting to read. For future response assignments, try out finding more ways to connect back to the original piece, including more links to references. This would have been a great opportunity to find a YouTube video of the classic commercial to reference, or more call backs to the original “Fuck Off Fund” piece. Great work!

Stretching of creative muscles: (+)

I loved your voice in this piece of writing. I felt like I was right in the room with you as you told a story. The pacing felt right and the arc of the story works for the style.

Using the right tools for the job: (✓)

Some typographical options would make this story really shine. Try using a large font or headline option for the story’s title. There were some memorable quotes that you wrote that would be well served as a block quote. Lastly, since the image is a main reference of the story, try having that at the top along with a reference in the caption, describing what it is and where it came from. Also, don’t be afraid to add more imagery! Otherwise, I’m glad you made the creative decision to include to the CK ad as a reference point.