Review of Poppy Xing’s, “A Bowl of Noodle Soup In The Winter Midnight”

Thoroughness and Comprehension: (✓)

It was clear that you were making a narrative piece that explored your subconcious during the midnight hours. Media wise, the piece felt a bit lacking. It would’ve been great to have more accompanied imagery and external links to support your story. Think about how the brain scattershots to references and external information when daydreaming. To have that represented in the writing would have strengthened its resonance.

Stretching of creative muscles: (+)

What I love most about this piece is the feeling it envokes. This feels like a narrator writing in their journal during the midnight hours, spewing out their stream of conciousness. The incoherence in this case works very well as a stylistic desicion. You created an environment with this piece and that’s what made it an enjoyable piece of writing.

Using the right tools for the job: (✓)

Explore more ways to connect the reader to the emotion and experience of pondering ideas late at night. Some things I would consider are visual references to the story, such as the different types of noodle soups. Even a GIF that looped through the different types of noodle soups would have been fun!