Review of Ritika Gupta’s “I’m a girl of Color”

Thoroughness and comprehension: ✔️

Stretching of creative muscles: ✔️

Using the right tools for the job: ➕

ritika.gupt96, thank you for writing this powerful piece of work. I loved your approach of looping in your own visibility and raising the issue of diversity in higher education. The introduction strong in the personal narrative style and the story started to build with this highlight:

“As much as I am worried for my black brothers and sisters, I’m worried for my brown-self too. I’m a writer and in this digital age, I publish and blog online a lot. I hope and pray my work does not go unrecognized.”

From there, the ending felt a bit flat. A bit more digging into some of the details that you mentioned throughout would have strengthened your points, such as explaining why you believe against the low enrollment of POC students being a direct relation of higher costs:

“The school’s expensive costs maybe a reason but I refuse to buy that.”

This was a perfect moment to set up a bit of a stronger argument to fill out and back up your point further. Other than that, well done piece, but a bit more exposition would have earned a ➕.

Thanks for writing this and looking forward to what you decide to tackle next!