Topic:
It is important to lean the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
to what extend do you agree and disagree with this opinion?
what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
Essay:
Nowadays more and more people think that it is necessary for children to tell right and wrong. some poeple argue that punishment is a good method of teaching them this distinction. But others donot think so. My firm conviction is that children should learn the difference between right and wrong, but not by punishing them.
On the one hand, punishment might have a negative influence on children`s physical and psychological development. Psysically, punishment might cause any hurt on their body. Mentally, punishment from their teachers and parents might make they suffer from metal and emotional pressure and stress that might make they so scary and unconfident when making friends or getting along with others.
On the another hand, punishment might make our society unhealter. The child will be our future. If punishment affect badly children`s growth and development, they might donot behave well so that there might be more criminals and violence in the society. Finally, if that happened, we would live in a unhealthy and undevelopment society.
From my point of view, there are lots of efficient ways to teach children about the difference between right and wrong rather than pushing them. Tell some stories about right and wrong, rewarding them for good heaviour and correcting when they make mistakes are good ways to achieve this. Of course, it might be helpful to teach them piack up rubbish they have dropped, clean up graffiti they haved drawn or apologise to someone they have hurt. Those efficient methods will lead better future behavior than does punishment.
Finally, to help the children learn the difference between right and wrong, teachers and parents have a responsibility to provide good role modeling in their own behaviour. Only by taking good ways can they teach children efficiently.
Band 6 (task response 6.5; coherence and cohesion 6; lexical resource 5.5; grammatical range and accuracy 5.5)
Notes:
- Review these words and remember their correct spelling: people, physically, mental, unhealthy, behavior, pick.
- Misspelled words do not only impede the delivery of ideas but these weaken cohesion and grammatical accuracy also.
- For this question, it is enough to write three paragraphs for the task’s main ideas, while conclusion is presented in the fifth paragraph.
- Improve the essay’s lexical resource.
Edited Essay (Band 7)
Nowadays more and more people think that it is necessary for children to distinguish right from wrong. Some people argue that punishment is a good method of teaching them this distinction, but others do not agree. My firm conviction is that children should learn the difference between right and wrong, but not by punishing them.
On the one hand, punishment might have a negative influence on children`s physical and psychological development. This approach is destructive, for instance in extreme cases, it debilitates a child’s fragile body, besides the mental and emotional damage a punishment brings is equally harmful. Such unconstructive aspects might make them unconfident in dealing with their friends or in getting along with others.
On the other hand, punishment makes a community unhealthy. Children are valued as the future, yet considering the punishment’s negative impacts on their growth and development, they might not behave well, so that there might be more criminals and violence in the society. If that happened, we would live in an unhealthy and underdeveloped society.
From my point of view, there are many efficient ways to teach children about the principles of ethics. For instance, telling them stories with moral lessons, using positive reinforcement and correcting them when they make mistakes are good ways to achieve this. Of course, it is likewise helpful to teach them to pick up rubbish they have dropped, clean up the graffiti they have drawn or apologise to someone they have hurt. Those efficient methods uphold positive discipline and right conduct, so these encourage appropriate behavior.
In conclusion, to help the children learn the moral principles, teachers and parents have the responsibilities to serve as role models and to enforce positive discipline. These accountable adults have to show appropriate behavior to children, only by taking good ways can they teach children efficiently.
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